Poor Imp

Plot move slowly --no! Too much goes on internally that's inextricably connected to the external there's always something happening in it. ^_^ Meaning I've read it, of course. ^_^ It's ...

Spacing between paragraphs helps on the forums--a bit hard to get through otherwise. Aside from that, I like the brevity of explanation and the interaction in the first chapter that ...

There's something amusing and straightforward about the off-the-cuff abandon of this piece--ridiculously random. ^_^ 'Seems a fun sort of thing to write. It's almost impossible to sift through for an ...

Hullo Shafter...I'm here to remark on and courteously tear to pieces your bit of fiction. ^_~ The thump of footsteps on the cold ground made Émon’s head snap up. Despite ...

It has a charming simplicity about it--a bit more placid, perhaps a bit more forthright--but reminds me of JM Barrie's style in Peter Pan . For over a month now, ...

In very brief: You've got a subject that's apt. School as a prison, peers and such--but you're telling more as if it were prose than describing. School is hell on ...

Well, I did say I'd read it, you know; and I meant to sooner. I'd have to ask same as Jig -- meant to be 'maul', meaning to attack/batter/mangle? Or ...

SPEW has found a more edifying end in life than eating kittens. Ha - thanks to Jack. ^_^ 'Love it. Poor Claudette is suddenly in the middle of everything though, ...

Oy - hilarious, Crys! ^_^ Norrington's tone was particularly in character; I could hear him saying it all. Jack as well, as I think of it... But Norrington... “I’ll take ...

Brief remarks here, because I've read it now a few times and always intended to critique. ^_^'' Malkin first, in both chapters -- He has to play the part of ...

Hullo Myth! seems a certain duty, you know - I really ought to critique the Fools' Duel entries. ^_~ A duty, of coures, without any implication of being irritating - ...

The exchange between interrogated and interrogator - I very much like the suspense, resigned bitterness on the one side, impassivity on the other. It begins with immediacy, draws the reader ...

She runs though the sky, tired but determined. As though free of the world she forgets the suffering and pain she has enflicted upon her own town and family. The ...

Oh dear. @_@ Ha - if I weren't half asleep, I'd probably have something more articulate or violent to say. I'll just glance over my shoulder instead. ^_^'' -- But ...

Just as David...I read most of it earlier - and it does come out much more neatly with the revision. In particular, Eleanor's first notice of the unicorn is cleaner; ...